Description Exercise

The river winds through a landscape of decaying and growing organic matter: the cycle of
life exemplified. The river has no water running through it, so it is just a wet riverbed. That’s exactly what the 3 meter-long water track leading to an iron drain seems to imitate in every way, save the size. Dead leaves litter the “banks” of the waterway, and tufts of delicate grass push up through the muddy tracks. A pattern reminiscent of the Nazca lines appears nearby, but is revealed to be the imprint of the sole of a Vans shoe only. The watermarks indicate a fork in the flow of water, with a raised median separating them, only to have them reconnect shortly after to enter the western-facing side of the drain. The bed of the water way is worn smooth, and small pebbles have collected at the beginning and end of the flow. It is perfect in its imperfectness.

Box Man Discussion Afterthoughts

1. Something that I learned about the passage that I hadn't noticed on my own was the structural progression from short paragraphs to longer and more explanatory paragraphs. It did this because the essay turned into more story-tellings and hypotheticals than before.

2. During the discussion I wished that we would have actually focused more on how the meaning was presented, and not about what the meaning was, the structure, interesting quotes, and other topics. Good job though as the facilitator Eddie.

3. I wish that I would have mentioned that the meaning was presented by contrasting examples of solitary people, as this could have incited more discussion about the how, not what.

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I Am A _________ Essay

Title: “Surely You’re Joking Mr. Feynman!”  Author: Richard P. Feynman

Subject: Science/Physics/Biography

Link to Long Form

 

-Nicholas